bratfarrar: A woman wearing a paper hat over her eyes and holding a teacup (jack!)
Brat Farrar ([personal profile] bratfarrar) wrote in [personal profile] seperis 2008-12-24 04:15 pm (UTC)

\o/

I'm so happy you've put this up for other people to read, because it is awesome, and there are so many bits that are just right. I love your Jack so much it's kind of ridiculous.

There are too many favorite parts for me to name them all, but thank you for having Jack push John away--
"John." Pulling back, Jack looks into the hazel eyes, surprised by the intensity, flares of summer green and hungry. "This is a bad idea. Really--" John shifts deliberately and yes, that's what they need here, thank you fucking *libido*, "--*bad idea*. John. *John*."

"Why?"

Jack licks his lips and regrets it, tasting John there, and God, why didn't he see this coming? Sumner might as well have written him a road map. "Because you aren't ready."

John straightens. "You have *got* to be kidding me. You *made me*--"

"Exactly." Holding John's eyes, Jack makes himself continue. "That's why."



Are you thinking of finishing the present-day part of the story, or has that well and truly stalled out?

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