I'd love to read it. I just keep thinking that it wouldn't necessarily be better--I just think all things being equal, the real difference is that Victoria has to eliminate everything in Fraser's life for it to work, but Ray Kowalski would only have to eliminate her to stop her. And he doesn't have any firm concept that Fraser's different when it comes to women--he'd read the situation correctly from the get-go, which would look like overreaction right until it doesn't.
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